The Leopold-Loeb inspired movie Murder by Numbers is turning 20 this month, so I wanted to celebrate its anniversary. A while back I bought scripts for Rope, Compulsion and Murder By Numbers. The first two only had very minor changes from the scripts I bought and the movies that were eventually released, but the Murder By Numbers script diverged significantly.
According to a script available for sale on ebay, the version I bought is from 6/29/2000, it’s the first revision after the original draft, was written by Tony Gayton, and is untitled. Starting on 2/8/2001 screenwriter Tony Bean was brought on for rewrites, and it is one of those rewrites which is up for sale, a 3/7/2001 version, called Foolproof, but since it’s $400, I won’t be able to use it for comparison.
By my count there are 16 scenes which are just in the original script, 16 just in the movie version, and 43 scenes that both share, even if the content is very different.
There are some minor changes: both the police captain and Justin’s love interest have different names (Jimbo Kills-A-Man and Sandy, I’ll let you decide who is who), the detectives Cassie and Sam don’t have sex in the earlier version and Cassie’s story ends not with her testifying against her ex-husband but joining a support group for victims of violent crimes. There are also racial slurs, a Nazi character, and Ray’s baboon kills itself with Cassie’s gun. But I assume if you’re here reading this, you’re more interested in the killers based on Leopold and Loeb, so I’ll focus on them.
The homoerotic but not overtly homosexual element seems to have been part of this project since the beginning. Though in the early version there is perhaps more of an emphasis on Justin’s love interest: she has more and longer scenes and is a turning point in the final confrontation. Before Justin goes to Richard for that confrontation he tells her: “There was a hole in my life…Richard got there first…but he didn’t fill it…he just made me emptier. I just wish I had let you in first. Things might have been different.” This reminds me heavily of the role Ruth played for Judd in the Compulsion novel, and casts Justin as a victim of Richard’s and the heterosexual relationship as what could have saved him.
There is more emphasis on philosophy in the early script, each scene where the killers discuss their motive goes on for much longer, and they each quote philosophical ideas to each other. In the movie this is dulled down to something like: freedom means doing crime, but in the early draft the opening voiceover of them on the cliff (there is no house on the bluff in this version) one says:
“His name is the word and the word is power. And he justifies all that goes before him just by being.”
And the other replies: “And the weak-minded shall name him evil and cast him down in a dark place and renounce his great deeds.”
This is much more in depth than in the movie version which is just: “One cannot live fully without embracing suicide and crime.”
In the early version the Leopold character Justin is described as wearing “designer glasses and even though he doesn’t dress like a nerd, his clothing is definitely different from the other kids. In a word, mature. And freakishly intelligent.” Which is quite different from the greasy, chain wearing Michael Pitt of the movie. In the early script there is much talk of Justin and Richard creating a new person together, which they swear to while holding hands as fire burns their arms chanting “the two of us are him.” Justin explains: “We created another person from the two of us. My brains, Richard’s cunning. He was above the law. A superior being. Richard wanted to see what he was capable of. It was supposed to be like some sort of fatal calculus. Murder by numbers. Cold and intellectual.” A vestige of this remains in the movie, visualized in the movie’s title and a melded picture of Richard and Justin, but isn’t nearly as explicit.
While the movie plays with the idea of who was worse, with Cassie believing Justin and mistrusting Richard right until the end when there’s a reveal than Justin was more cold and heartless than previously thought, in the earlier script there’s much less subtlety: Richard is much more evil all the way through. He also plants evidence several times leading the police to Justin alone, in the hopes that he would be able to go free. There’s again a line indicating this in the movie, in which Richard says they only have evidence on Justin and not him-but Richard didn’t plant that evidence.
Related to this, the biggest change relating to scenes involves a plot about Justin’s greenhouse. He raises orchids and has a hybrid with unique seeds. These seeds are some of the evidence Richard planted on the body, leading the police to Justin. Scenes of Ray’s ex-wife being questioned, Ray’s body being examined and much to do about the seeds and analysis were replaced completely with Cassie being confronted by Richard, hitting him with her car door, rummaging through his trash, sending it off for DNA analysis and being told to stop working on the case-all of which were not in the early draft. Far from the squeamish Richard we see in the movie who cries when killing Ray and who can’t bring himself to kill their victim, early script Richard records the murder and listens to it in his car in the school parking lot.
As Justin explains to his love interest: “The night of the murder…it was supposed to be a rehearsal…I didn’t know he was going to kill her…not until I got to his house and saw her there. Dead. I panicked. I did what Richard told me to do.” There is no indication that he’s lying here, both his love interest and Cassie believe this and nothing in the script contradicts it (other than Richard’s false confession to the police, which is also in the movie). In the movie it is Justin who kills their victim, and both boys seem to know what’s going on and are on board with the plan every step of the way.
Another plot that was completely cut from the movie was that the victim looks like Richard’s mother, Cassie saying that before she married Richard’s rich-step father, his mother had a police record for prostitution, drugs and drunk driving, giving Richard a motive for subconsciously wanting to lash out against her. Both Justin and Richard’s parents are given more focus in the early script; Justin’s mother a ghostly figure who drifts around silent in the background of scenes and Richard’s parents are shown to be almost equally uninterested in their son: sitting drunk in front of the tv. While movie Cassie has a line about both teenagers getting money instead of familial affection, much of this was cut from the eventual movie.
The confrontation between the killers and the police is also very different. Going with the version of a much softer Justin, early script Justin asks Cassie the name of their victim while holding a gun to his head. When she tells him he replies “That’s a beautiful name. Will you tell her family that I’m sorry? Will you do that for me?” When Cassie tells Justin that his love interest said she loves him he doesn’t kill himself, but reaches out for Cassie, who hugs him, despite Richard’s attempts to get him to pull the trigger. When the cliff crumbles and Richard falls, Justin grabs him and though Richard tries to pull Justin down with him, he doesn’t succeed. Richard dies, and his body is pulled out to sea.
Being able to read this earlier version, many things that confused me about the movie that was released now make sense. The focus on the melded version of Richard and Justin especially, but also missing scenes; in the movie we see detective Sam go to school and talk with Lisa, but it never comes up again. In the earlier script Sam brings her in to talk to the police and Cassie tells this to Justin during the confrontation. The scene with Justin confronting his love interest in the hallway about her having sex with Richard also goes on longer, and she pleads to get him to understand, rather than the movie version, which just ends with a slap. It’s jarring in the movie to then see her trying to help him when it’s revealed he’s a murderer, if they ended on such bad terms, but the longer version better explains her state of mind and the guilt she feels. I’m unclear if some of this was changed in later versions of the script or shot and edited out of the final movie. While I’m not sure if the earlier version would have been better than the product we got, I do think it would have at least made more narrative sense than what was released in theatres.